Wednesday, May 8, 2013

Scars

Poet's United
 
Your task for this week's Verse First is to write succinctly
 and boldly about a personal experience.
The only rule: No more than 100 words. Succinct. Bold. GO!
 
 
SHE RAN HER FINGER OVER DARK PURPLE LINES
CRISS CROSSING THE SURFACE OF MY SKIN
WITH A TENDER TOUCH AND A QUIET VOICE
SHE ASKED ME TO SPEAK THEIR NAMES
 
WHAT BLADE LEFT THIS LINE
LIKE A TATTOO ON YOUR SKIN
WHAT LIFE CHANGED
WITH EVERY BLEEDING DROP
 
HER TOUCH ALMOST STUNG,
THE HEAT ALMOST TOO INTENSE
SHE WAITED FOR MY BREATH TO RETURN
HER HAND STILL UPON MY SKIN
 
AS IF SHE COULD WIPE AWAY SCARS
SHE NEVER TOOK HER HANDS OFF OF ME
I KNEW I WOULD NEVER SEE HER NAME
ETCHED INTO THE SURFACE OF MY SKIN
 

22 comments:

  1. How lovely that she can heal you from within, without the scars in your skin ~ May you always hear her voice ~

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  2. OwWOOOOOOOOO! I.Love.This.Poem. It gave me tears and goose bumps. There are lines on this page I never thought to see and I am grateful!

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  3. Love the tenderness of this poem, beautiful!

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  4. wow. i really felt this one. whoever "she" is, is truly a blessing.

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  5. cool piece - I enjoyed every line. The mystical tone really added to the whole.

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  6. So powerful - the poem, and the brilliant kindness of the woman speaking, who is gifted with empathy. A poem that probes the reader's heart.

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  7. Wipe away the scars - Healing is a process that takes away pain and the scars of life, you have captured it beautifully.

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  8. wow. Very powerful and poignant.

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  9. Wrinkles and scars, the maps of our history. I like hwo you handled this.

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  10. Heavy but hopeful, some strong images as well.

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  11. This took my breath away! Thank you fro sharing it!On The Border

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  12. What trust to tell her each name and to know she will not be "ETCHED INTO THE SURFACE OF MY SKIN"

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  13. I am reading this to mean that this poem is about someone who is totally accepting....scars and all.

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  14. very intense write, you followed the prompt well. As a integrative therapies healer I appreciate the connection you approach in this. Quite taking, send my peace to you ~ Rose

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  15. very intense. scars always have a tale to tell

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  16. A very mystical feeling to this poem and quite sensual too.
    Dropping by from Verse First.

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  17. Oh this is so beautiful and even though there is a penetrating sadness that last line really does give a sense of hope and healing

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  18. She sounds like a loving and trustworthy presence...someone we all need in our lives. This is beautiful!

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  19. AMAZING, Andrea! With perfect brevity, you allow your reader to feel the touch, the emotion, the connection. Amazing! SO glad you shared this at Verse First.

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/05/10/wounded/

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  20. This is spectacular, friend.

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