Poet's United
Your task for this week's Verse First is to write succinctly
and boldly about a personal experience.
The only rule: No more than 100 words. Succinct. Bold. GO!
SHE RAN HER
FINGER OVER DARK PURPLE LINES
CRISS
CROSSING THE SURFACE OF MY SKIN
WITH A TENDER
TOUCH AND A QUIET VOICE
SHE ASKED ME
TO SPEAK THEIR NAMES
WHAT BLADE
LEFT THIS LINE
LIKE A TATTOO
ON YOUR SKIN
WHAT LIFE
CHANGED
WITH EVERY
BLEEDING DROP
HER TOUCH
ALMOST STUNG,
THE HEAT
ALMOST TOO INTENSE
SHE WAITED
FOR MY BREATH TO RETURN
HER HAND
STILL UPON MY SKIN
AS IF SHE
COULD WIPE AWAY SCARS
SHE NEVER
TOOK HER HANDS OFF OF ME
I KNEW I
WOULD NEVER SEE HER NAME
ETCHED INTO
THE SURFACE OF MY SKIN
How lovely that she can heal you from within, without the scars in your skin ~ May you always hear her voice ~
ReplyDeleteOwWOOOOOOOOO! I.Love.This.Poem. It gave me tears and goose bumps. There are lines on this page I never thought to see and I am grateful!
ReplyDeleteLove the tenderness of this poem, beautiful!
ReplyDeletewow. i really felt this one. whoever "she" is, is truly a blessing.
ReplyDeleteAN ANGEL...............
ReplyDeletecool piece - I enjoyed every line. The mystical tone really added to the whole.
ReplyDeleteSo powerful - the poem, and the brilliant kindness of the woman speaking, who is gifted with empathy. A poem that probes the reader's heart.
ReplyDeleteWipe away the scars - Healing is a process that takes away pain and the scars of life, you have captured it beautifully.
ReplyDeletewow. Very powerful and poignant.
ReplyDeleteWrinkles and scars, the maps of our history. I like hwo you handled this.
ReplyDeleteHeavy but hopeful, some strong images as well.
ReplyDeleteThis took my breath away! Thank you fro sharing it!On The Border
ReplyDeleteWhat trust to tell her each name and to know she will not be "ETCHED INTO THE SURFACE OF MY SKIN"
ReplyDeleteI am reading this to mean that this poem is about someone who is totally accepting....scars and all.
ReplyDeletevery intense write, you followed the prompt well. As a integrative therapies healer I appreciate the connection you approach in this. Quite taking, send my peace to you ~ Rose
ReplyDeletevery intense. scars always have a tale to tell
ReplyDeleteA very mystical feeling to this poem and quite sensual too.
ReplyDeleteDropping by from Verse First.
Oh this is so beautiful and even though there is a penetrating sadness that last line really does give a sense of hope and healing
ReplyDeleteShe sounds like a loving and trustworthy presence...someone we all need in our lives. This is beautiful!
ReplyDeleteAMAZING, Andrea! With perfect brevity, you allow your reader to feel the touch, the emotion, the connection. Amazing! SO glad you shared this at Verse First.
ReplyDeletehttp://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/05/10/wounded/
This is spectacular, friend.
ReplyDeleteA fascinating story.
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