tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2603588489333151910.post7581890103105354135..comments2023-03-30T05:13:08.008-07:00Comments on Lines on a page...: Haunted Nightaka_andreahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15388010898688586760noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2603588489333151910.post-600696463048790892011-11-19T20:33:17.600-08:002011-11-19T20:33:17.600-08:00Very clever tale in this tricky poetic form. I tr...Very clever tale in this tricky poetic form. I tried too, but too late for the deadline. Thanks for sharing this haunting tale.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2603588489333151910.post-25981298427968357892011-11-18T14:50:30.058-08:002011-11-18T14:50:30.058-08:00I love this! I so enjoy these haunting, mysteriou...I love this! I so enjoy these haunting, mysterious types of writings. You did wonderfully well with this form.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2603588489333151910.post-20463831381487798002011-11-18T06:57:38.191-08:002011-11-18T06:57:38.191-08:00that last stanza is chilling. gasp, gasp and that...that last stanza is chilling. gasp, gasp and that the ghost of the past in already inside of us - I love it!Sheilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06541409754494611831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2603588489333151910.post-7442066849174009062011-11-18T06:53:56.894-08:002011-11-18T06:53:56.894-08:00definitely spooky...awesome :)definitely spooky...awesome :)Cathy Feasterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01302068829418562420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2603588489333151910.post-60756322718104430092011-11-18T06:24:03.184-08:002011-11-18T06:24:03.184-08:00Well captured. A little spooky... Love that last s...Well captured. A little spooky... Love that last stanza!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2603588489333151910.post-21145601132113260952011-11-18T04:47:00.525-08:002011-11-18T04:47:00.525-08:00I enjoyed this. The last two lines are wonderful!I enjoyed this. The last two lines are wonderful!Laurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2603588489333151910.post-30515882355471061472011-11-17T20:41:19.120-08:002011-11-17T20:41:19.120-08:00bwahahaha...smiles. love a good ghost story and th...bwahahaha...smiles. love a good ghost story and this was right up that alley great use of language to set the tone of this as well...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2603588489333151910.post-68659134961582454562011-11-17T20:15:30.969-08:002011-11-17T20:15:30.969-08:00Fun! It seems as if it just ripped off your pen w...Fun! It seems as if it just ripped off your pen with ease! I really, really struggled.Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00007201357693227614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2603588489333151910.post-22456339748592769222011-11-17T20:08:46.373-08:002011-11-17T20:08:46.373-08:00Great flow, message, and execution of the form.Great flow, message, and execution of the form.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2603588489333151910.post-47961006274076006962011-11-17T19:26:31.837-08:002011-11-17T19:26:31.837-08:00Haunting and also philosophic. I loved the ending ...Haunting and also philosophic. I loved the ending and thought it was very true. You managed every element of the form perfectly save one. You didn't repeat the exclamatory word as the first of the last line in each stanza. That seems to be picking at threads when the entire garment is so beautifully constructed. I don't think with any form, one has to be a slave to it. It's good to know the constraints and then it's OK to skirt them. This was compelling and beautiful.Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2603588489333151910.post-13834494824397386962011-11-17T18:53:35.539-08:002011-11-17T18:53:35.539-08:00What a fantastic ending! Love it!What a fantastic ending! Love it!Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2603588489333151910.post-118098285754047192011-11-17T18:13:18.830-08:002011-11-17T18:13:18.830-08:00Eerie and compelling. You show the effective use o...Eerie and compelling. You show the effective use of the repeats in line 3 of each stanza. The ending is wonderful.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2603588489333151910.post-60767505627779277002011-11-17T17:44:23.377-08:002011-11-17T17:44:23.377-08:00All right!! I like this. especially the clinche...All right!! I like this. especially the clincher at the end.<br /><br />good job.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2603588489333151910.post-67454457487359319142011-11-17T17:36:05.244-08:002011-11-17T17:36:05.244-08:00Great poem. I love the supernatural feel to this ...Great poem. I love the supernatural feel to this piece. Great job with adhering to the staccato form. I found it a bit restrictive with the syllabic constraints, but fun still, yet I could only get two stanzas out. You really made it seem effortless, so fluid and seamless a painting here. ThanksAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05885047796180529498noreply@blogger.com